Tips For Presents, from the Editors!!

Check out these specialized tips for putting your best foot forward, Presents-style!

First things first...

Think about your goals when writing a great Presents first chapter.   You want to:

  • Grab your reader's attention
  • Get her hooked in
  • Keep her turning the pages and wanting more

These three aims might seem very simple, obvious even.  But many new writers fail to consider them when they sit down to start their stories...

Here are the most common writing personalities and their mistakes that our editors see when they're reading unsolicited submissions while searching for new Presents talent:

  • The Free Spirit who has no idea on what her story is or where she's going when she begins her book.
  • The Procrastinator who ‘writes herself in'.  She spends two to three chapters unfolding a long, rambling back-story and setting the scene, and there's no romance or hero-heroine action in sight.
  • Ms No-Man's-Land who doesn't introduce the hero until chapter two... or even later!
  • She-who-saves-the-best-for-last, and who clings to the assumption that writers (and editors) will be understanding and hang in there until Chapter Four or Five when her romance really gets going...
  • Me-Me-Me uses a lot of descriptive narrative, choosing to tell the story and so inserting herself between the readers and the characters, rather than letting characters speak for themselves
  • The Party Animal includes loads of minor characters - but who are the hero and heroine?
  • The Show-stopper thinks of a great opening line or paragraph and then...her book goes downhill from there!

Let's be clear about a couple of things.  In terms of word length, these are short books (50, 000 words total).  So you haven't got time to warm up or wait for the hero to arrive!  And, despite the quickness of the read, every reader expects to have taken a ride on an emotional rollercoaster by the time she finishes your book.

The Presents Editor's Golden Rules for Packing a Punch from the Very First Page:

  • Make the writing of a synopsis of your story your very first task.
  • Also be sure of who your hero and heroine are before you start and aim to get them together as soon as possible.
  • Keep the focus on the hero and heroine and their developing romance as much as you can.
  • Give your reader a tantalising taste of the emotional conflict within the first few pages.
  • Give evidence of the sexual attraction between the hero and heroine too.
  • Aim to unfold the back-story in bite-sized pieces throughout your book - not immediately, in one long, indigestible chunk!
  • Use dialogue - when the characters speak for themselves, readers will be instantly engaged.
  • Keep minor characters to an absolutely minimum and use them to support the unfolding romance - don't start giving them a life of their own!
  • Keep an eye on your pace - it should be tight and fast from page one, with the aim of keeping the reader turning the pages.
  • Aim to end your first chapter on a climax - and invite the reader to read on.

It may seem like a lot to remember, but actually it's all about creating a focused emotional environment for your characters and their romance.  Good luck!

Dee Tenorio
"The real art of conversation is not only to say the right thing in the right place, but also to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment."

Generating Emotional Conflict in Harlequin Presents

Emotional conflict is the key to writing a Presents novel.  Ultimately, the characters, their romance and indeed the plot are all driven by it.  To understand it better, let’s ask a few questions and get some answers.

Why does a Presents novel need emotional conflict?

Really, you can’t have a satisfying romance without it!  Many people who scorn romances use the reason that they are ‘soppy’ and ‘slushy’.  But those of us who read them and love them know that, actually, romance fiction is not all hearts and flowers.  Just as real-life relationships have ups and downs, so do the heroes and heroines in novels.  Readers want to see conflicts played out and resolved.  In Presents, the level of conflict is high and it’s intense.

Remember these two things when writing conflict:

  • Conflict between the two main characters generates emotional tension and sexual suspense
  • Characters are driven by conflict – and they, in turn, will drive the story.

What is emotional conflict?

There are two types of conflict that will progress a romance: internal and external.

Internal conflict is the more important and can come about by two routes:

  • Character;  a conflict can grow out of the hero or heroine’s fundamental personality, and will include how their lives and backgrounds have shaped them, what their motivations and aspirations are.  For example, your hero is now an international billionaire who is ruthless in business and love, having clawed his way out of an orphaned background in the slums of Naples.
  • Emotional conflict; this exists within the central relationship.  For instance, an unexpected pregnancy or an arranged marriage can upset two colliding worlds!

External conflict is less important that internal, but still has a place within a romance novel.  Basically, it comes from misunderstandings and circumstances, e.g., the hero has arrived to take over the heroine’s father’s ailing company and uses her perilous position to blackmail her into a relationship.  Or it can come about because of another secondary character’s influence, e.g., the hero’s father is dying and wants to see his son married.

How can you create a satisfying emotional conflict?

Here are the Presents editors’ top tips.

  • Choose internal conflicts as the main drivers of your story
  • Use external conflicts as added twists
  • Make sure your chosen conflict is well developed, well motivated and consistent with the characters and their situations
  • Check that your conflict is believable, relevant for the reader and sustainable over the course of a whole book
  • Ideally, construct two or three emotional conflicts that can be played out and resolved through your story
  • Conflict isn’t a continual argument between the hero and heroine!
  • Layer your conflict with highs and lows, advancements and retreats, passion and withdrawal.

Can you think of a Presents that you’ve read recently that you loved because it was passionate, high octane and kept you on the edge of your seat as you turned the pages?  Chances are it had some great conflicts!  Why not go back and study just how the author did it – and then let us know your conclusions on the boards here or on iheartpresents.com.

Dee Tenorio
"The real art of conversation is not only to say the right thing in the right place, but also to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment."

Living with and Loving the Alpha Male!

What would we Presents readers do without our Alpha heroes?  We all have our personal all-time favourites, the memorable men who’ve made us go weak at the knees from the moment we’ve met them.

But how, as a writer, do you create a successful Alpha hero?   We editors read many manuscripts in our search for new talent to publish in Presents and too many times we meet heroes who just aren’t Alpha enough!  They just don’t live up to their heroic status and they certainly don’t engage our emotions and our imaginations.

We realise that in these days it’s not always easy to create an Alpha hero.  We live in an age where equality is (quite rightly) the aim and male strength can be seen as oppressive.  Our cultural male heroes are more likely peacemakers, environmentalists and family men.  But the success of Presents proves that many women still fantasize about strong men – not macho brutes, I hasten to add, but guys who use their power for good.  

So let’s go to the heart of the Presents male and analyze what makes him tick:

The Alpha Male does two crucial things:

He takes control and drives the story; he has the power to make things happen!


He is the key driver of the romance – he is the aspiration of the story’s heroine (and the reader)

The Alpha Male is a celebration of strength!

How do you create a successful alpha-hero?

Recognise that he is the ultimate nurturer and build his character around this trait.  He acts for the welfare of others and he is the one who recognises the heroine’s true goodness and worth.
Build a list of his strengths and reveal them as his character develops in your story.

 Keep him focused. This is what he has done to become such a success in his life, so he will always follow through to the end – unless he sees the sense of changing course.


Show his passion - for his work, his life and in the bedroom!


Know his flaws and have the heroine, and the storyline, challenge them – so that he has to contemplate changing himself and his behaviour.  Though changing will always remain his choice!


Be clear about the heroine’s emotional and sexual needs.  It is through her journey of fulfilment via the hero that the reader gains insight into his character.


Use writing technique to create a more complex rendering of his character, such as male point of view, and semi-climax when crisis occurs as a result of the hero’s flaws.


Be sure that by the last chapter our hero has experienced his own emotional journey ad he’s ready to settle down to a happy ending.

Above all, remember that he is the man whom every woman wants.  If you are in love with your hero, then the reader will be too!

Dee Tenorio
"The real art of conversation is not only to say the right thing in the right place, but also to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment."

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